Flash Fiction Friday (13)

on January 27, 2012 in Featured, Flash Fiction, Flash Friday with 19 comments by

Hello, Hello! Flash Fiction Friday is here again. Is it me, or are the weeks flying by lately? Geesh.

A 100 word story, picture prompt. This weeks picture was chosen by Lisa Worrall.

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“What are you doing on the dresser, sweets?”

Sara crossed the sterile bedroom and sat on the rumpled bed. She looked around, taking in the empty bottles. When she glanced up at Scott, his head rested on his knees, arms locked tight. She’d never witnessed her brother so miserable.

His eyes held haunted knowledge.

Sara stood, walked to the closet and opened it.

Empty.

One man had the power to bring her brother to his knees. To put that hollow edge to his cheeks. Then she noticed the tear tracks.

“Where’s Mark?”

Scott’s will broke. “He left.”

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19 comments

  1. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 1:22 PM  |  reply

    I love it!! Well done!

  2. jade baiser
    posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 2:32 PM  |  reply

    Oh, it’s so sad!! I could feel the poor guy sorrow!
    great post

  3. Lee Brazil
    posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 2:32 PM  |  reply

    Oh,no! Aww. ER! That’s tragic. Great post.

  4. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 3:53 PM  |  reply

    Wow! Very nice emotion in this. Love the way you kept the tension throughout.

  5. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 6:00 PM  |  reply

    Sad, touching…great tension and build-up.:) xo

  6. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 7:02 PM  |  reply

    Ooh bittersweet but very well done!

  7. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 7:17 PM  |  reply

    How sad. Very good story.

  8. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 7:50 PM  |  reply

    Very well done my love – so sad

  9. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 8:46 PM  |  reply

    I’m guessing she’s the older sister. Well, she needs to tell him to get dressed and stop being a wuss. Tough love he needs tough love.

  10. posted on Jan 27, 2012 at 8:56 PM  |  reply

    Aww, poor guy. Now sister has to cheer him up and give that “there’s plenty other fish in the sea” chat. Nice post.

  11. Sherri Hayes
    posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 12:47 AM  |  reply

    Aw. How sad. I hope his sister can cheer him up.

  12. posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 1:16 AM  |  reply

    I liked this. I could see it in my head. Great imagining in only 100 words. Great Six.

  13. AuroraRose Andromeda
    posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 3:47 AM  |  reply

    Wow! Poor guy. I hope his sister can get him back on his feet. Great post!

  14. posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 3:35 PM  |  reply

    How sad. I feel for the guy. Great post!

  15. Havan
    posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 5:16 PM  |  reply

    No! You made me sniffle! The emotions in this just…the work up to the last sentence…oh man…great FFF!

  16. posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 6:17 PM  |  reply

    So very sad. So very good!!

  17. CJM
    posted on Jan 28, 2012 at 9:54 PM  |  reply

    Fabulous post — loved it!

  18. posted on Jan 29, 2012 at 1:54 AM  |  reply

    Bummer! But maybe he’s better off without Mark in his life if he has the power to hurt him so badly. :(

  19. posted on Jan 29, 2012 at 3:13 PM  |  reply

    Aw, get the guy a blanket and a nice cup of tea!

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